Private View: Andrew Lok

A beautiful woman approaches an advertising copywriter at a party and asks, "So what do you do?" Sensing that he might get lucky, he replies with confidence, "I create ads." Understandably interested, she adds, "Have I seen anything you've done?" He promptly describes some, and gets the following feedback.

McDonald's: Wow! They're quite funny, and different from most McDonald's ads. But since McDonald's is now telling me that its crew can save the Queen and stop a runaway train, I'll be a bit disappointed if they ever get my order wrong. (He thinks: "Yes! She thinks I'm funny and different.

Note: must remind my client to crack the whip internally. A memorable ad is disastrous if its promise is not delivered.")

Sony: I remember that. It's quite cool. Are you saying that the picture quality of a Sony is so good that it'll stop me in my tracks? (He thinks: "Yippee! Keeping it simple works every time.")

Vicks: Not bad. The house falling apart due to a bad cough is quite funny. You have a sense of humour. I like that. (He thinks: "Funny is good. Funny works. Let's see, none of the ads blew her away, but most of the work kept her interested. Now it's time to close the sale.")

Chevrolet: Oh, okay. My uncle owned a Chevy once. (He thinks: "Okay?! What do you mean okay?! Why aren't you blown away by how we strategically linked our target audience's choices in 'life journeys' to the thought of 'trusting one's choices' and finally to the fact that Chevrolet is 'chosen and trusted' by 30 million people, including her uncle? We ticked all the boxes in the brief for goodness sakes!")

MobileOne: It's the one with people behaving like chickens right? My friends were talking about it. But what does it mean? (He thinks: "Whew. Well, at least it got talked about. Maybe I should make the idea clearer by writing a whole series of 10-second ads featuring even wackier situations and then demonstrating clearly that it is M1 that makes them possible? Sort of like how the 'Lynx/Axe Effect' is demonstrated.")

Surf: Whoa. What's with the music and cinematography? It's like a detergent ad by Jerry Bruckheimer and Michael Bay. But ... there's something really sweet about how ordinary people going about their lives are portrayed as heroes. (He thinks: "Hmm ... Everybody's a movie buff. I'm glad we went over the top with the treatment of this spot. If you can't zoom in on the funny bone, reach for the heartstrings, I always say. Hope she now thinks I'm a sensitive guy.")

Certain that his career achievements impress her a little, he leans over to ask, "So ... what do you do?" She responds between sips of champagne, "I'm a rocket scientist. Currently, I'm writing a feasibility study for a manned mission to Mars."

(In the real world, beautiful women do not approach copywriters. But in a real world, people do respond to what's entertaining and surprising.

So if our ads do not stand out from the morass of cliched communication that already exists, do we truly deserve to get laid, whoops, I mean paid, for what we do?)

Andrew Lok is a copywriter at BBH, and the next ECD of Ogilvy Guangzhou. He is married

MCDONALD'S</Paragraph[xyz]Campaign: 'Runaway Train'

Client: McDonald's

Brief: acknowledge the outstanding job that McDonald's crews are doing.

Agency: Leo Burnett Sydney

Creative director: Glen Ryan

Art director: Adam Rose

Copywriter: Ben O'Brien

Production house: Curious Films

SONY WEGA V

Campaign: 'Freeze'

Client: Sony

Agency: Leo Burnett/M&T Vietnam

Executive creative director: Jonathan Swanepoel

Creative director: Piet Human

Senior art director: Paul Busschau

Copywriter: Tong Thanh Nguyen

VICKS

Project: Vicks F44

Client: Procter & Gamble Indonesia

Brief: maintain efficacy as the main reason why people need Vicks F44

for their toughest coughs

Agency: Publicis Metro

Executive creative director: Donald Ee

Creative director: Emmy Kartika Soetrisno

Senior art director: Shinta Leilany

Senior copywriter: Bunga Fitra Manan

CHEVROLET

Project: brand campaign</Paragraph[xyz]Brief: announce Chevrolet launch and build brand awareness

Agency: McCann Erickson Guangming

Creative director: Lee Chi Chuan

Art director: Chu How

Copywriter: Adam Wang

Production house: Match Box

MOBILEONE

Campaign: 'Flash Mob'

Client: MobileOne

Brief: reinforce M1's brand positioning

Agency: TBWA\Singapore

Copywriters: Parag Tembulkar (lead writer), Jason Ng

Art directors: Loh Swee Chen (lead art director), Chris Tan

Production house: Play Films Singapore

SURF

Project: 'Hanap Buhay'

Brief: promote the product awareness

Agency: Lowe Manila

Creative director: Raul Castro

Copywriters: Chachu Lascano, Frances Posa-Ramos

Art directors: NJ Mijares, Noel Bermejo

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